Some people think the government should ban dangerous sports and some others think it is a freedom to choose the activities we want to. Discuss both view and give your opinion. 有人认为政府应该限制危险性的运动,有人认为人人有权利选择自己喜爱的运动。讨论两种观点,给出你的意见。(2011年7月30日 = 2014年8月9日)
【作家立场】 人生没有冒险就不能称其为人生(支持极限运动)。
【文章布局】:
首段:背景介绍 + 作家立场
二段:正方观点的展开(我的口吻谈及极限运动的利好)
三段:反方观点的展开(我的口吻谈及极限运动的弊端)
尾段:再次亮明观点 + 提出建议
【小鹏哥语料库】
① 极限运动危险运动的类型:
1. bungee jumping n蹦极
2. paragliding n跳伞
3. surfing n海上冲浪
4. scuba-diving = deep sea diving n 深海潜水
5. rock climbing n攀岩
② 极限运动之多元表达:
1. run the risk of doing sth v冒险做……
2. dangerous sports activities n危险性体育运动
3. challenging sports events n充满挑战性的竞技体育
4. extreme adventures n极限运动
5. extreme sports n极限运动
③ 支持极限运动:
1. forge one’s fortitude v铸造人的坚韧性
2. chasten one’s tenacity v 磨练人的顽强
3. foster one’s frustration toleration v培养人的挫折忍受能力
4. If they are banned,then many sports would go underground. 如果被限制,很多体育项目会消失。
5. surpass oneself v 超越自我
④ 反对极限运动:
1. suffer from injuries or even deaths v 遭遇伤害甚至死亡
2. become an excuse for violence v成为暴力的借口
⑤ 作家立场:
1. Greater attempts should be made to prevent accidents or injuries v 我们应该做出努力预防以外事故和伤害
2. ensure sports are challenging, exciting and amusing v 确保运动是充满挑战,令人兴奋,使人愉快的。
【原创范文】:
{首段}:背景介绍 + 作家立场
Such is human nature to explore the unknown. A trend is that numerous people are keen on embarking on challenging sports events such as mountain biking, rock climbing or scuba diving , especially among those dynamic young adults. My stand is that we should pursue excitement and sense of refreshment in the dull routine daily life. After all, life without risk is no life at all.
【解析】:Life without risk is no life at all 人生没有冒险就不能称其为人生。
{二段}:正方观点的展开:
Granted, many virtues could be gained via undertaking those risky sports activities. Primarily, the extreme adventures can be taken as an effective way to help players relieve their pressure and vent their negative emotions, for the occupied modern life often deprives one’s right of seeking relaxation. The popularity of bungee jumping accounts for risky sports’ significant function in terms of reducing stress. Imaginably, one’s working efficiency could be highly enhanced after doing his or her favorite sports events. Moreover, not only can the extreme adventures exert wholesome impacts , but it also could foster one’s skills, chasten one’s tenacity and forge one’s frustration toleration. Some extreme adventures, such as rock climbing and surfing, requires high techniques or much stamina . Ultimately, the extreme adventures could be developed into tempting tourism items, which could generate immense economic value.
【解析】:
1.The extreme adventures can be taken as an effective way to help players relieve their pressure and vent their negative emotions. 极限运动是一种很好的方式去帮助运动者缓解压力,释放不良情绪。
2. It also could foster one’s skills, chasten one’s tenacity and forge one’s frustration toleration. 极限运动同意可以培养人的技能,磨练人的坚韧,铸造人的挫折忍受能力。
{三段}:反方观点的展开:
Nonetheless, problems invariably ensue. One possible downside is that some perilous sports activities might become the roots of injuries and agonies. There exist high levels of injuries, which sometimes disables players and even ruins their lives. Another adverse aspect is that some intense extreme sports are merely an excuse for violence. To illustrate, boxing involves excessive violence and bloody contents so that it adversely influences adolescent Television viewers, namely, it might arouse their sadistic impulses.
【解析】:
1. Some intense extreme sports are merely an excuse for violence. 一些极限运动也许会成为暴力的借口。
2. It might arouse their sadistic impulses. 极限运动也许会诱发一个人施虐的冲动。
{尾段}:再次亮明观点 + 提出建议
Personally, I encourage the extreme adventures, for it symbolizes freedom, so it is citizens’ elementary right to opt for his or her favorite sports activities. Attempts should be made to ensure risky sports events are thrilling, amusing and profit-making, however, to prevent accidents and injuries is highly recommended(328)
【解析】:
Attempts should be made to ensure risky sports events are thrilling, amusing and profit-making. 我们应该做出努力去保证极限运动是刺激的、有趣的、盈利的。
注解:本文8分,写作过程出现笔误,例如单复数、语序、冠词、缩写等瑕疵。现已修改,因此,现在的范文应为8.5分。文无定法,本篇以第一人称口吻谈及两种观点,主题明确、首尾呼应、自圆其说、有理有据、可为考生赏析之佳作。
作者介绍:
薛鹏(@雅思小鹏哥),新东方网专栏作家,高中时代出版诗文集《选择坚强》,每年创作20万字原创语料库以及范文。吉林大学外国语言学及应用语言学硕士。17年英语教学经验 (7年新东方雅思托福SAT教学经历),前长春新东方功勋教师,多次培训出雅思和托福高分学员(雅思写作8.0分,托福写作29分)。
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